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Have you ever been to an outdoor concert?
I don\'t have any experience of being at an outdoor concert. In fact, I don\'t really like to go to a concert. I think I\'ve been to concerts only 2 times before and they were indoor concerts. Of course, I have several singers and bands that I like. However, I think I like their music regardless of their humanity. Those 2 concerts that I\'ve been to were as a joint concert so there were several singers and bands. Nevertheless, there is a concert that I want to go to. The singer\'s name is Park Hyosin. I like his voice and most of his songs are fantastic. His concert is so famous so that it\'s very hard to buy a ticket. One of my friends joined his fan club because it\'s an easier way to get the ticket.
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I don\'t have any experience of being at an outdoor concert.
>>I don\'t have any experiences in being at an outdoor concert.
In fact, I don\'t really like to go to a concert.
>>CORRECT
I think I\'ve been to concerts only 2 times before and they were indoor concerts.
>>CORRECT
Of course, I have several singers and bands that I like.
>>Of course,there are several singers and bands that I like.
However, I think I like their music regardless of their humanity.
>>CORRECT
Those 2 concerts that I\'ve been to were as a joint concert so there were several singers and bands.
>>CORRECT
Nevertheless, there is a concert that I want to go to.
>>CORRECT
The singer\'s name is Park Hyosin.
>>CORRECT
I like his voice and most of his songs are fantastic.
>>CORRECT
His concert is so famous so that it\'s very hard to buy a ticket.
>>His concert is so famous which is why it\'s very hard to buy a ticket.
One of my friends joined his fan club because it\'s an easier way to get the ticket.
>>CORRECT
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