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2020-08-05 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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Some companies are investigating the possibility of putting television programs on phones. How would you feel about watching your favorite television program on your mobile phone? Answer in 5 sentences or more. These days, people can watch TV on their phones because there are many platforms that people can watch TV shows, series and movies. My favorite platform is Netflix. After I paid for Netflix, l don\'t watch TV anymore. This is because I can watch TV with my phone in everywhere. That kind of industry makes people live more comfortable and easy. I also think that watching television programs on phone is so good to relax.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!

You did an outstanding job today.

The corrections were really minor.

You used correct terms and expressions.

You did a really good job.^^

~~ Teacher Sharon

These days, people can watch TV on their phones because there are many platforms that people can watch TV shows, series and movies.

>> These days, people can watch TV on their phones because there are many platforms where people can watch TV shows, series and movies.

My favorite platform is Netflix.

>> Correct
After I paid for Netflix, l don\'t watch TV anymore.

>> After I started paying for Netflix, l don\'t watch TV anymore.
This is because I can watch TV with my phone in everywhere.

>> This is because I can watch TV with my phone everywhere.
That kind of industry makes people live more comfortable and easy.

>> That kind of industry makes people live more comfortably and easily.
I also think that watching television programs on phone is so good to relax.

>> I also think that watching television programs on the phone is really good for relaxation.

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