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Some people think that we need to limit our population by killing other people via wars or acts of terrorism, like Thanos in the Marvel movie. Even many villains in movies think the same way with this. However, we should think another way because we cannot say it\'s the right way. First, I thought about why we destroy our planet. We disrupt and destroy the natural environment because we need to use the resources. We need to consume those resources for keeping our life and more convenient. I found the solution to this idea. First of all, we need to reduce consumption. Also, we can save our resources by recycling or walking instead of driving. These are simple ways of the solution. Plus, we should develop eco-friendly resources. Lastly, I think we can find more resources from space. That\'s why some people, such as Elon Musk, are studying spaceships, and Mars.
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Very nice answer~
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Some people think that we need to limit our population by killing other people via wars or acts of terrorism, like Thanos in the Marvel movie.
>>CORRECT
Even many villains in movies think the same way with this.
>>CORRECT
However, we should think another way because we cannot say it\'s the right way.
>>However, we should think of another way because we cannot say it\'s the right way.
First, I thought about why we destroy our planet.
>>CORRECT
We disrupt and destroy the natural environment because we need to use the resources.
>>CORRECT
We need to consume those resources for keeping our life and more convenient.
>>We need to consume those resources to keep our life and for convenience.
I found the solution to this idea.
>>CORRECT
First of all, we need to reduce consumption.
>>CORRECT
Also, we can save our resources by recycling or walking instead of driving.
>>CORRECT
These are simple ways of the solution.
>>These are simple ways towards the solution.
Plus, we should develop eco-friendly resources.
>>CORRECT
Lastly, I think we can find more resources from space.
>>CORRECT
That\'s why some people, such as Elon Musk, are studying spaceships, and Mars.
>>CORRECT
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