homework
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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
Have you ever been in a disaster?
I\'ve not ever been in a disaster which is a life-threatening size of before. However, I have an experience that I affected by the disaster once. It was normal Sunday in 2014 summer. At that time, I was having a vacation at a beach in Korea. While I was having lunch one of my colleagues called me that some serious thing happened so I had to go to the office right away. I asked what happened and she said that the office building was on fire. Thus, I had to go to the office to handle my machines and I had to have been there several days without relaxing. I had to move up some dry-ices to the server rooms for cooling down the machines and I moved some critical systems to the other data centers. It\'s a horrible experience but it\'s also valuable.
* related article of the happening
https://thenextdigit.com/5299/samsungs-backup-data-center-building-caused-site-downtime/amp/
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]!
It\'s scary~
I\'m glad nothing happened to the people.
It would be a terrible thing to happen!
Anyway, have a good weekend!
See you next week.
I\'ve not ever been in a disaster which is a life-threatening size of before.
>>I\'ve never been in a disaster which is life-threatening before.
However, I have an experience that I affected by the disaster once.
>>However, I have an experience regarding a disaster once.
It was normal Sunday in 2014 summer.
>>It was a normal Sunday in the summer of 2014.
At that time, I was having a vacation at a beach in Korea.
>>CORRECT
While I was having lunch one of my colleagues called me that some serious thing happened so I had to go to the office right away.
>>CORRECT
I asked what happened and she said that the office building was on fire.
>>I asked about what happened and she said that the office building was on fire.
Thus, I had to go to the office to handle my machines and I had to have been there several days without relaxing.
>>Thus, I had to go to the office to handle my machines and I had to be there for several days without relaxing.
I had to move up some dry-ices to the server rooms for cooling down the machines and I moved some critical systems to the other data centers.
>>I had to move up some dry-ice to the server rooms to cool down the machines and I moved some critical systems to the other data centers.
It\'s a horrible experience but it\'s also valuable.
>>CORRECT
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