Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Here is my homework :) See you tomorrow teacher!
강사 첨삭
Good evening [이름]!
Here the correction for today :)
Saying directly, the biggest change in families is just number.
>>>Directly speaking, the biggest change in family is just numbers.
And I think this is not only our country, but also all across the world.
>>>And I think this is the same not only in Korea but also in the whole world.
The member of family is being decreased these days.
>>>The number of family members is decreasing these days.
According to my grandmother, she had lived with 4 more siblings, and total number of her family was 7.
>>>According to my grandmother, she lived with her four brothers, and her family had seven in total.
We couldn’t imagine that scene now in Korea.
>>>We couldn’t imagine that scene in Korea now.
As time goes by, the nuclear family age has arrived.
>>>Over time, the era of nuclear families has arrived.
So like us, 3 members or 4 members in one family is most often in Korea.
>>>So there are 3 or 4 people in a family like us in Korea.
In my case, I really want to live with alone or if not, just with my husband.
>>>In my case, I really want to live alone or just live with my husband.
That’s my dream.
>>>CORRECT!
I don’t want to have baby.
>>>I don’t want to have a baby.
And there are many friends around me who have same thinking.
>>>And there are many friends who have the same thoughts around me.
And I think it’s because regardless of gender, careers of oneself are most important.
>>>And I think it\'s because your career is the most important regardless of gender.
So we have to improve ourselves and vocations, and next we could be acknowledged with any others.
>>>So we need to improve ourselves and our jobs, and next time we\'ll be able to get recognition from others.
It’s the first value that young people have, and also me.
>>>It\'s the first value young people have, including me.
I can say clearly that few years later, the most often member of family will be 2.
>>>After a few years, I can say for sure that there will be the most number of family members will be the most common.
This is the biggest change in families.
>>>This will be the biggest change for families.
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