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There are lots of effect when we have an aging population.
>>There are many effects when we have an aging population.
First, there is a lot of cost that the young to pay for old people.
>>First, there are many costs that young people pay for the elderly.
The youth are responsible for caring for the elderly through work.
>>CORRECT!
OR: The youth are responsible for caring for the elderly through work.
But this is also a social problem as the number of senior citizens is increasing too much.
>>CORRECT!
OR: But this is also a social problem as the number of senior citizens is drastically increasing.
Also, the government has a welfare policy for the elderly.
>>Also, the government has welfare policies for the elderly.
Like Korea, is an aging country and it is getting worse.
>>Korea has an aging population and it\'s getting worse.
So Korea is making more welfare policy over time but a lot of money is spent on welfare policies.
>>So Korea is making more welfare policies over time, but a lot of money is spent on welfare policies.
To sum up, the larger the aging population, the greater problem we have to solve.
>>To sum up, the larger the aging population, the bigger the problem we have to solve.
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