Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Q. How do you think the world would be 30 years from now?
A. After 30 years from now, I think the world would automatically work. On behalf of my hands and brain, computer would do most of things in the future. But I can\'t help thinking about the future positively as we see the world going worse theses days. I\'m also afraid of that we should keep wearing a mask as we do now to protect us from viruses and air pollution. I hope that we do our best to protect the earth so that the world would change into better way than now.
강사 첨삭
Hi Bomi! Thank for catching up with your homework. I really appreciate it! ^ ^
You shared good thoughts about this. Your sentences are okay, but it would be better if you try to explore more with words and make them sound more appealing. ^ ^
I hope that 30 years from now, there will be more positive things happening than undesirable ones. ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
After 30 years from now, I think the world would automatically work.
>>Thirty years from now, I think the world would become more automated.
On
behalf of my hands and brain, computer would do most of things in the
future.
>>Instead of my hands and brain working, computers will do most of my jobs for me.
But I can\'t help thinking about the future positively as we see
the world going worse theses days.
>>CORRECT
I\'m also afraid of that we should
keep wearing a mask as we do now to protect us from viruses and air
pollution.
>>I\'m also bothered that we have to wear masks just to protect ourselves from viruses and pollution.
I hope that we do our best to protect the earth so that the
world would change into better way than now.
>>I hope that we do our best to protect the earth so that the
world would become a better place to live for us and future generations.
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