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My most creative thing was that I made a beat!! It’s not that long. It’s only 3 seconds!!
I new that music is too hard because I took 1 hour to make 3 seconds music.
I think I can make lots of beats when I don’t do game and do music but game is too active!!
Maybe I can try to do not play games.
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You should let me hear you do the beat! :)
My most creative thing was that I made a beat!! It’s not that long. It’s only 3 seconds!!
>> The most creative thing that I made was a beat!! It’s not that long. It’s only 3 seconds!!
I new that music is too hard because I took 1 hour to make 3 seconds music.
>> I new that music is too hard because I took 1 hour to make 3 seconds music.
I think I can make lots of beats when I don’t do game and do music but game is too active!!
>> I think I can make lots of beats when I don’t play games. But I am so active when it comes to games.
Maybe I can try to do not play games.
>> Maybe I can try not to play games.
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