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2020-09-24 · 첨삭 강사 Ysabelle

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: What are you most afraid of? How can this hinder you from accomplishing your goals? I think I am afraid of the behavior that I have to show the real nature of myself. I don\'t think I am a very ethical person and I have my eagerness and also have greedy nature. For example, I want to look at a beautiful girl straightly but, I don\'t want to be shown like that. Also, I don\'t want to waste my money or time to help other people with the issue that I\'m not related to. However, I\'d like to look like a nice and kind gentleman to the other person. Thus, I always try to change my mind and correct my behavior. I don\'t know if this is going to help to achieve my goals but I am sure that if I would overcome this then it would help to prevent bad consequences someday.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]! 
Thank you for answering! 
I believe that as long as you try to become a better person, you are already good. 
Keep on trying and you will succeed.
Have a nice day!


I think I am afraid of the behavior that I have to show the real nature of myself.
>>CORRECT

I don\'t think I am a very ethical person and I have my eagerness and also have greedy nature.
>>CORRECT


 For example, I want to look at a beautiful girl straightly but, I don\'t want to be shown like that.
>>CORRECT

 Also, I don\'t want to waste my money or time to help other people with the issue that I\'m not related to.
>>CORRECT

 However, I\'d like to look like a nice and kind gentleman to the other person. 
>>However, I\'d like to look like a nice an kind gentleman to other people. 

Thus, I always try to change my mind and correct my behavior.
>>CORRECT

 I don\'t know if this is going to help to achieve my goals but I am sure that if I would overcome this then it would help to prevent bad consequences someday.
>>CORRECT

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