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What are some good and bad points about social networking?

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There are many things that I want to talk about social networking.

>>There are many things, I want to say about social networking.

Because I’m also hard user of SNS , like Instagram and kakaotalk. 

>>Because I’m also an avid user of SNS like Instagram and kakaotalk. 

So I have experienced many bad points and good points about social networking. 

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First advantage of SNS is that we could communicate each other very quickly. 

>>First advantage of SNS is that we could communicate with each other very quickly. 

Through message, we could communicate wherever we are.

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 Next, we could find our needed information.

>> Next, we could find the needed information.

 In 21st, we are living in an information-flood, so we could find information that we really need through clicking.

>> In the 21st ,century we are living in an information-flood, so we could find information that we really need through clicking.

 Finally, there are very many interesting sources in our phone like Youtube or Facebook, so could spend our time when we are boring. 

>>Finally, there are very many interesting sources on our phones like Youtube or Facebook, so we could spend our time when we are boring. 

But not only advantages, there are also disadvantages about social networking. 

>>But not only advantages, but there are also disadvantages of social networking. 

First, when we are addicted in Social Networking, we might lose our control and hard to escape it. 

>>First, when we are addicted in Social Networking, we might lose our control and, hard to escape from it. 

SNS could harm our body and mental, so we have to watch out and try to not indulge it. 

>>SNS could harm our body and mind, so we have to watch out and try to not indulge in it. 

Next, there is high risk that our personal information is leaked. 

>>Next, there is a high risk that our personal information is leaked. 

There may be personal information hacking, and furthermore, it can lead to financial problems. 

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Therefore, we must control ourselves when we use social networking.

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 And when we use it in right way, it could help us in many ways.

>> And when we use it in the right way, it could help us in many ways.