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2020-10-07 · 첨삭 강사 Ysabelle

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: If you won the lottery, would you still pursue your profession now? I would pursue my profession even if I won the lottery ticket. First, I think a human needs to keep working until he died because without working the life wouldn\'t be meaningful. We don\'t have to accomplish great things but at least we should do something for humanity and nature. For example, cleaning the street, recycling, making a great product, so on. Also, even if I won the lottery, it wouldn\'t be enough to spend it for the whole life. In fact, I would feel the money will never be enough.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!
Very nice  answer!
I also agree. 
Our needs are never-ending.
Have a good night!


I would pursue my profession even if I won the lottery ticket.
>>CORRECT

 First, I think a human needs to keep working until he died because without working the life wouldn\'t be meaningful. 
>>First, I think a human needs to keep working until he dies because without working the life wouldn\'t be meaningful. 

We don\'t have to accomplish great things but at least we should do something for humanity and nature.
>>CORRECT

 For example, cleaning the street, recycling, making a great product, so on. 
>>CORRECT

Also, even if I won the lottery, it wouldn\'t be enough to spend it for the whole life.
>>CORRECT

 In fact, I would feel the money will never be enough.
>>CORRECT

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