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Relaxing is very important because when I get stressed a lot, I need to refresh that. I usually refresh stress with games and music. Without the hobbies you like, the stress will be bigger and bigger and finally, you will have a disease.
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Relaxing is very important because when I get stressed a lot, I need to refresh that.
>> Relaxing is very important because when I get stressed a lot, I need to refresh my thought so I can function.
I usually refresh stress with games and music.
>> I usually relieve my stress with games and music.
Without the hobbies you like, the stress will be bigger and bigger and finally, you will have a disease.
>> Without the hobbies you like, the stress will get bigger, and finally, you will have a disease.
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