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2020-11-16 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

학생이 쓴 원문

I am in the Samsung a/s center. I am waiting to fix my daughter\'s cellphone. This is what i think i am important all my life. Familly is my destination. I feel happy when i am with my familly. Sometimes which makes me bother,even though i love my familly. I think that all of people love their familly. If i were alone,i would like money. Money makes me lots of chance. But i don\'t want to be a slave of money. I want money to follw me. Anyway,familly is most of important.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon, Mr. [이름]!😊

Thank you for sharing your thoughts about how important your family is. You always talk about them in our class. They are lucky because you are their father. Always enjoy wonderful moments with them.😉

~Kelly^^

I am in the Samsung a/s center.

>> I am in Samsung a/s center.
I am waiting to fix my daughter\'s cellphone.

>> I am waiting for my daughter\'s cellphone to be fixed.
This is what i think i am important all my life.

>> This is what I consider important in my life.
Familly is my destination.

>> My family is my sanctuary.
I feel happy when i am with my familly.

>> I feel happy when I am with my family.
Sometimes which makes me bother,even though i love my familly.

>> Sometimes, I feel bothered even though I love my family.
I think that all of people love their familly.

>>I think, all people love their family.
If i were alone,i would like money.

>> If I were alone, I would choose money.

Money makes me lots of chance.

>> Money opens lots of opportunities.
But i don\'t want to be a slave of money.

>> But, I don\'t want to be a slave of money.
I want money to follw me.

>> I want to do what I want because I have money.
Anyway,familly is most of important.

>> Anyway, family is important.

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