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If I have to choose between great wisdom and great wealth, it will be too hard to choose and need more time.
Great wisdom will make my life better. I think life is continuation of regrets. In my case, every moment I had regrets about something and great wisdom will make my regrets reduced. So great wisdom is very good enough to choose.
However, in reality almost all people want great wealth as I do. I know money is not all and can\'t buy happiness.
But I can\'t ignore money at all. We all work hard to be happy, which is connected with money very deeply.
I\'ve heard some news that someone who won lottery ended up with a bad ending.
Moderation is the best, I think. But if I have to choose between them, I will choose great wealth because my wisdom is not too bad right now from my point of view. If I am younger, I will choose the former.
Anyway, when I look back my life, I excatly got to know something very important, which is that no matter what we have or do, extreme things are bad.
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Hi, [이름]!
Thank you for taking the time to respond. Very well said. See you in class!
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If I have to choose between great wisdom and great wealth, it will be too hard to choose and need more time.
>>If I have to choose between great wisdom and great wealth, it will be too hard to choose and I will need more time.
OR
>>It will be too hard to choose between great wisdom and great wealth and I will need more time.
Great wisdom will make my life better.
Great wisdom will make my life better.
>>CORRECT
I think life is continuation of regrets.
>>I think life is the continuation of regrets.
In my case, every moment I had regrets about something and great wisdom will make my regrets reduced.
>>In my case, I feel regretful about something every time and having great wisdom could lessen that feeling.
So great wisdom is very good enough to choose.
>>CORRECT
However, in reality almost all people want great wealth as I do.
However, in reality almost all people want great wealth as I do.
>>However, in reality, almost everyone would want to have great wealth like I do.
I know money is not all and can\'t buy happiness.
>>CORRECT
But I can\'t ignore money at all.
But I can\'t ignore money at all.
>>CORRECT
which is connected with money very deeply.
>>Which is why we are strongly connected to money.
I\'ve heard some news that someone who won lottery ended up with a bad ending.
I\'ve heard some news that someone who won lottery ended up with a bad ending.
>>I\'ve heard from some news that someone who won the lottery ended up badly.
Moderation is the best, I think.
Moderation is the best, I think.
>>CORRECT
But if I have to choose between them, I will choose great wealth because my wisdom is not too bad right now from my point of view.
>>But if I have to choose between them, I will choose great wealth because from my point of view, my wisdom isn\'t too bad right now.
If I am younger, I will choose the former.
>>CORRECT
Anyway, when I look back my life, I excatly got to know something very important, which is that no matter what we have or do, extreme things are bad.
Anyway, when I look back my life, I excatly got to know something very important, which is that no matter what we have or do, extreme things are bad.
>>Anyway, when I look back in my life, I learned something which was very important and that is no matter what we have to do, things done extremely are bad.
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