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2020-11-28 · 첨삭 강사 Rachel

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If I have free time, I want to study chemistry. I like chemistry because it is very interesting to understand the reaction between two or three phases. Actually, I studied it when I was a high school student and a freshman. But I thought it was not enough to study other subjects; chemistry is the basic foundation to both organic and inorganic chemistry. So, I believe that studying chemistry will help me to understand the upper concept of complex theories. Studying is sometimes a kind of burden to me, but studying chemistry is the time that I can fully concentrate on myself. Another reason why I want to do it is that I think I\'m not good at calculating thermodynamical reactions. Whenever I search some papers, I find it difficult to understand why the reaction works out. It makes me fraustrated and gives me the reason why I have to do it. So, if I have free time, I want to study chemistry with a book alone.

강사 첨삭

Hello Su [이름]!
Wow, you are such a diligent student. I mean not everybody is interested in science and I think your curiosity in finding out the reason why things happen is such a great attitude toward learning. I admire your diligence and determination. ^ ^
-Rachel 
If I have free time, I want to study chemistry.
>> correct
>> OR: If I have spare time, I want to learn chemistry. 
 I like chemistry because it is very interesting to understand the reaction between two or three phases.
>> correct
 Actually, I studied it when I was a high school student and a freshman.
>> correct
 But I thought it was not enough to study other subjects; chemistry is the basic foundation to both organic and inorganic chemistry. 
>> correct (awesome sentences and great usage of punctuation marks)
So, I believe that studying chemistry will help me to understand the upper concept of complex theories.
>> correct
>> OR: So, I reckon that studying chemistry will help me to understand the higher concept of complex theories. 
 Studying is sometimes a kind of burden to me, but studying chemistry is the time that I can fully concentrate on myself. 
>> Studying can be burdensome for me, but learning chemistry makes me fully concentrate on what I am learning. 
Another reason why I want to do it is that I think I\'m not good at calculating thermodynamical reactions. 
>> Another reason why I want to do it is that I am not good at calculating thermodynamic reactions. 
Whenever I search some papers, I find it difficult to understand why the reaction works out. 
>> Whenever, I do research about the concept, I find it difficult to understand why the reaction works out. 
It makes me fraustrated and gives me the reason why I have to do it. 
>> It makes me frustrated and gives me more reasons to study more. 
So, if I have free time, I want to study chemistry with a book alone.
>> Thus, if I have free time, I want to study chemistry with a book alone. 

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