homework
학생이 쓴 원문
-Should rich people and corporations be forced to give to charity? Why or why not?
There is no reason why the rich and successful companies have to pay attention to charity.
Spending their money on good things or bad things is always depend on one’s own decision-making and liberty.
But they have to remind all the time that they couldn’t earn that money without the society where they exist in.
And money shouldn’t be stack in one place for particular someone, otherwise the society maybe fall in to malfunction.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]! ^_^
Thank you so much for doing your homework.
You have used good vocabulary. Great job!
And I definitely agree with you~ ^^
- T. Rina
1. There is no reason why the rich and successful companies have to pay attention to charity.
>> CORRECT!
2. Spending their money on good things or bad things is always depend on one’s own decision-making and liberty.
>> Spending their money on good things or bad things always depends on one’s own decision-making and liberty.
3. But they have to remind all the time that they couldn’t earn that money without the society where they exist in.
>> But they have to be reminded all the time that they couldn’t earn that money without the society where they exist in.
OR: But they have to remember all the time that they couldn’t earn that money without the society where they exist in.
4. And money shouldn’t be stack in one place for particular someone, otherwise the society maybe fall in to malfunction.
>> And money shouldn’t be stacked in one place for a particular someone, otherwise the society maybe fall into malfunction.
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