HOMEWORK
학생이 쓴 원문
It seems that many children now have TVs in their bedroom. Do you think this is a good idea? Why or why not? Discuss 3 to 5 sentences.
-> I think having TVs in the bedroom is not good action.
Because if one child has a TV in his bedroom, his health will be bad because of electromagnetism.
Also his eyes can be bad because of electromagnetism.
강사 첨삭
Hey, [이름]. Happy Christmas Eve!^^ Thank you for doing your homework. You managed to express your ideas more and I appreciate the effort. Keep it up. I am glad to know you understand how not having a television in the room is not beneficial. Enjoy your Christmas. Have a good one! ~Teacher Jane c\",)
I think having TVs in the bedroom is not good action.
>> I think having a TV in the bedroom is not good. / I think having a TV in the bedroom is not a good idea.
Because if one child has a TV in his bedroom, his health will be bad because of electromagnetism.
>> CORRECT =)
>> OR: Because if one child has a TV in his/her bedroom his/her health will be affected by electromagnetism.
Also his eyes can be bad because of electromagnetism.
>> Also, he/she will have vision problems because of electromagnetism.
I think having TVs in the bedroom is not good action.
>> I think having a TV in the bedroom is not good. / I think having a TV in the bedroom is not a good idea.
Because if one child has a TV in his bedroom, his health will be bad because of electromagnetism.
>> CORRECT =)
>> OR: Because if one child has a TV in his/her bedroom his/her health will be affected by electromagnetism.
Also his eyes can be bad because of electromagnetism.
>> Also, he/she will have vision problems because of electromagnetism.
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