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2021-01-15 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

학생이 쓴 원문

I agree to a certain extent. Because people like to be comfortable. The more technology advances to more comfortable. And I think that if technology does not improve, the country can\'t develop. But the traditional technology must not disappear. Because it was left by ancestors. I wish I could develop by combine traditional technology with technology.

강사 첨삭

Hi there [이름]~! ^^ Thank you for always studying hard in class. Keep going!

>>> TEACHER GEMMA

I agree to a certain extent.

>>> CORRECT
Because people like to be comfortable.

>>> CORRECT
The more technology advances to more comfortable.

>>> The more technology advances, the more comfortable people will be.
And I think that if technology does not improve, the country can\'t develop.

>>> And I think that if technology does not improve, the country can\'t be developed.

But the traditional technology must not disappear.

>>> CORRECT
Because it was left by ancestors.

>>> Because it was passed by our ancestors.
I wish I could develop by combine traditional technology with technology.

>>> I wish I could develop the combination of traditional technology with another technology.

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