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2021-01-21 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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I think when they get older, their bones age. So if they exercise incorrectly, their bones break easily. And it is hard enough to exercise beacuse they get tired easily. The solution is to exercise more efficiently than to much. And it is good to walk for 30 minutes a day. When they get used to it, they should better to increase their exercise time. And eating a nutritious meal is also important.

강사 첨삭

GOOD MORNING [이름]~! ^^ “A dream does not become reality through magic; it takes sweat, determination, and hard work.”

Keep up the good work!

>>> TEACHER GEMMA

I think when they get older, their bones age.

>>> I think when they get older, their bones will get weaker.
So if they exercise incorrectly, their bones break easily.

>>> So if they do improper exercises, their bones could break easily.
And it is hard enough to exercise beacuse they get tired easily.

>>> And it is hard enough to exercise because they easily get tired.

The solution is to exercise more efficiently than to much.

>>> The solution is to exercise more efficiently.

And it is good to walk for 30 minutes a day.

>>>And it is good to take a walk for 30 minutes a day.
When they get used to it, they should better to increase their exercise time.

>>> When they get used to it, they should increase their exercise time.
And eating nutritious meal is also important.

>>> CORRECT

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