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Todays, Cases of child abuse is increasing constantly.
A few days ago, I saw a case of \'Jung-in\' on the news.
She was adoptee.
Her foster patrnts adopted her for show.
They were good parents with other people.
But, For the rest, they starved her and treated badly
\'Jung-in\'died in 16 months after adoption.
Many people was angry at her dead.
So our goverment is investigating how to prevent child abuse.
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Hello, [이름].
This is really a sad news~
Thank you for sharing this~
Have a good weekend!
- T. Rina
1. Todays, Cases of child abuse is increasing constantly.
>> These days, cases of child abuse are increasing constantly.
>> These days, cases of child abuse are increasing constantly.
2. A few days ago, I saw a case of \'Jung-in\' on the news.
>> A few days ago, I saw the case of \"Jung-in\" on the news.
>> A few days ago, I saw the case of \"Jung-in\" on the news.
3. She was adoptee.
>> She was adopted.
4. Her foster patrnts adopted her for show.
>> Her foster parents adopted her for show.
>> She was adopted.
4. Her foster patrnts adopted her for show.
>> Her foster parents adopted her for show.
5. They were good parents with other people.
>> They were good parents with their other kids.
>> They were good parents with their other kids.
6. But, For the rest, they starved her and treated badly
>> But, they starved and treated Jung-in badly.
7. \'Jung-in\'died in 16 months after adoption.
>> Jung-in died 16 months after the adoption.
>> But, they starved and treated Jung-in badly.
7. \'Jung-in\'died in 16 months after adoption.
>> Jung-in died 16 months after the adoption.
8. Many people was angry at her dead.
>> Many people were angry for her death.
>> Many people were angry for her death.
9. So our goverment is investigating how to prevent child abuse.
>> So our government is investigating how to prevent child abuse.
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