homework
학생이 쓴 원문
I don\'t agree.
When a country develops technology, a country disappears some of the traditional technology and was of life.
But they were used by ancestors.
Therefore they must not let them disappear.
I think it would be better to combine traditional technology to make technology that can be developed.
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I don\'t agree.
>>> CORRECT
When a country develops technology, a country disappears some of the traditional technology and was of life.
When a country develops technology, a country disappears some of the traditional technology and was of life.
>>> When a country develops technology, it disappears some of the traditional technology used in life.
But they were used by our ancestors.
But they were used by our ancestors.
>>> CORRECT
Therefore, they must not let them disappear.
Therefore, they must not let them disappear.
>>> CORRECT
I think it would be better to combine traditional technology to make technology that can be developed.
I think it would be better to combine traditional technology to make technology that can be developed.
>>> I think it would be better to combine traditional technology to make it more developed.
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