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Do you think bullying should be made a crime or is it part of growing up?
-> I think bullying should be made a crime, not a part of growing up.
First, if our friends do something that we don\'t want, then we will fill very bad.
Same as us, other people will feel bad if we do something that he / she doesn\'t want.
Second, if we didn\'t do anything when someone does bullying, he / she will think bullying is allowed.
That\'s why bullying should be made a crime, not a part of growing up.
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Hi [이름]! I feel the same way. Victims of bullying get hurt no only physically but mentally as well. They should put a stop to this.
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First, if our friends do something that we don\'t want, then we will fill very bad.
Same as us, other people will feel bad if we do something that he / she doesn\'t want.
I think bullying should be made a crime, not a part of growing up.
>>CORRECT
First, if our friends do something that we don\'t want, then we will fill very bad.
>>CORRECT
Same as us, other people will feel bad if we do something that he / she doesn\'t want.
>>CORRECT
Second, if we didn\'t do anything when someone does bullying, he / she will think bullying is allowed.
>>Second, if we don\'t do anything when someone bullies another person, some people might think that bullying is okay.
OTHER: We should be a good example to other people.
That\'s why bullying should be made a crime, not a part of growing up
>> CORRECT
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