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2021-03-11 · 첨삭 강사 Kate

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2021.3.8.MON

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Hello Claire!
Thanks for the composition. See you tomorrow! ^^
~~Teacher Kate

Many people had a trivial but exciting weekend before COVID19 happened.

>>Many people had trivial but exciting weekends before COVID19 happened.

I was also the same as them. I spent an exciting weekend before this pandemic happened.

>>CORRECT!

Before COVID19 started, many people spent their weekend time outdoors.

Businessmen and women have had meetings in their works.

Children met their friends without masks and they weren’t picky about choosing places for playing.

>>CORRECT!

After COVID19 started, many people spend their daily days in their homes.

Meetings home and meet friends online. Also, lots of events and festivals are canceled. Many professional researchers are saying that many people are sick with depression, and many people are growing fat.

>>After COVID19 started, many people spend their daily lives in their homes.

Meetings home and meet friends online. Also, lots of events and festivals were canceled. Many professional researchers are saying that many people got sick with depression, and many people are growing fat.

The damages that influenced by COVID19 are the world economy’s decrease and various illnesses. Because of these damages, people can’t enjoy their weekend that much.

>>The damages that were caused by COVID19 include the decline of the world economy’s and various illnesses. Because of these damages, people can’t enjoy their weekend that much.

A person who closed their stores (usually restaurants and cafes) gets a loss in their business.

>>CORRECT!

Therefore this loss of business can influence their life surely. It can be a big economic problem for them and the world.

>>CORRECT!

For students, they are studying at home. Therefore many students are falling into idleness with their learning.

>>CORRECT!

But hard studiers are studying more because they are thinking it’s a good chance to learn more.

>>But, good students are studying more because they are thinking it’s a good chance to learn more.

That’s why polarization is getting higher. If the polarization of learning doesn’t stop, it will be a big problem.

>>CORRECT!

This problem causes stress and stress will connect to the illness.

>>CORRECT!

These are why many people aren’t having exciting weekends these days.

>>These are why many people don\'t have exciting weekends these days.

Even though there are many problems and troubles, my family tried to have fun on weekend keeping COVID19 rules. My family watched horror movies and treat us to delicious homemade foods. Many people are having a hard time but there is always a way out even it’s hard right now.

>>Even though there are many problems and troubles, my family tried to have fun on weekends while keeping COVID19 safety rules. My family watched horror movies and treat ourselves to delicious homemade food. Many people are having a hard time but there is always a way out even though it’s hard right now.

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