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I think Yangyang becomes the hottest place because there are many beautiful cafes in there.
Many Koreans have a habit that is after having a meal, we go to beautiful cafes to talk with friends.
So, whether or not the place has beautiful cafes is important factor in Korea.
Also, Yangyang has many private beaches, so tourists can do surfing if they pay for it.
It is the reason why people go to Yangyang.
If I travel in Yangyang, I want to go to GILZO hotel.
GILZO hotel is one of the most famous places in Yangyang. It is similar to Japanese ryokan.
I wanted to stay there, so I have tried to make a reservation there but I always failed.
I will stay there someday.
<I am sorry I can’t write it long because I have period pains today. I will do my best after this time. >
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I think Yangyang becomes the hottest place because there are many beautiful cafes in there.>> I think Yangyang becomes the hottest place for travel because there are many beautiful cafes there.
Many Koreans have a habit that is after having a meal, we go to beautiful cafes to talk with friends.
Many Koreans have a habit that is after having a meal, we go to beautiful cafes to talk with friends.
>> Many Koreans have a habit that after having a meal, we go to beautiful cafes to talk with friends.
So, whether or not the place has beautiful cafes is important factor in Korea.
So, whether or not the place has beautiful cafes is important factor in Korea.
>> So, whether the place has beautiful cafes or not, it is an important factor in Korea.
Also, Yangyang has many private beaches, so tourists can do surfing if they pay for it.
Also, Yangyang has many private beaches, so tourists can do surfing if they pay for it.
>> CORRECT
It is the reason why people go to Yangyang.
It is the reason why people go to Yangyang.
>> CORRECT
OR For this reason, people are attracted to visit Yangyang.
If I travel in Yangyang, I want to go to GILZO hotel.
OR For this reason, people are attracted to visit Yangyang.
If I travel in Yangyang, I want to go to GILZO hotel.
>> If I travel to Yangyang, I want to go to GILZO hotel.
GILZO hotel is one of the most famous places in Yangyang.
GILZO hotel is one of the most famous places in Yangyang.
>> CORRECT
It is similar to Japanese ryokan.
>> CORRECT
I wanted to stay there, so I have tried to make a reservation there but I always failed.
I wanted to stay there, so I have tried to make a reservation there but I always failed.
>> CORRECT
OR I have been looking forward to staying in the hotel, so I have attempted to make reservations several times but I always failed.
I will stay there someday.
>> CORRECT
<I am sorry I can’t write it long because I have period pains today.
I will stay there someday.
>> CORRECT
<I am sorry I can’t write it long because I have period pains today.
>> (I am sorry I can’t write it long because I have menstrual cramps today.
I will do my best after this time. >
>> I will do my best after this time.)
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