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2021-03-23 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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Is peer pressure beneficial or harmful? Explain your answer. -> I think peer pressure can be harmful to some particular situations. ex) I am good at exersize then my friend, but all students have to get a same education. Then it can be very harmful to me. But it can cause lots of problems to do not doing a peer pressure. If we do not do peer pressure, it can cause discreamination. But I think peer pressure can be harmful to some particular situations.

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I think peer pressure can be harmful to some particular situations.
>> CORRECT

ex) I am good at exersize then my friend, but all students have to get a same education.
>> For example, I am good at exercising and my friend isn\'t and they are pressuring me to be like him. 
PS: KINDLY PARAPHRASE THIS SENTENCE. 

Then it can be very harmful to me.
>> CORRECT

But it can cause lots of problems to do not doing a peer pressure.
>> It can also cause some problems like discrimination. 

If we do not do peer pressure, it can cause discreamination.
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE. 

But I think peer pressure can be harmful to some particular situations.
>> This is why I think peer pressure can be harmful to some particular situations.

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