homework
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(I couldn’t read the news because the URL address disappeared. Therefore I just guessed the news and answered the question.)
1. I disagree with this opinion. Korean foreign minister is a woman who is heavier than 50kg but she isn’t lazy rather she is a shrewd person.
I think self-discipline is more related to personality than weight.
2. If women have body anxiety to meet the standards of beauty, I want to say ‘Don’t mind it’.
In fact, anywhere in the world, women have body anxiety because most women have been evaluated for their appearance since they were young.
It was taken for granted for women to have a pretty face and slim body.
Wearing a makeup when women become an adult is a natural thing in the world.
But we should note that it is only imposed on women not men.
Women care too much about their appearance because of a social atmosphere.
To improve human right of woman, we should don’t mind our appearance.
It is time to stub out double standards.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]! Your answer was informative. I guess you are good at guessing! I love how you explain your opinions. Keep it up!-Faith-
(I couldn’t read the news because the URL address disappeared. >> CORRECT
Therefore I just guessed the news and answered the question.)
>> CORRECT
1. I disagree with this opinion.
1. I disagree with this opinion.
>> CORRECT
OR I see eye to eye with the writer.
Korean foreign minister is a woman who is heavier than 50kg but she isn’t lazy rather she is a shrewd person.
>> The Korean foreign minister is a woman who is heavier than 50kg but she isn’t lazy rather she is a shrewd person.
I think self-discipline is more related to personality than weight.
I think self-discipline is more related to personality than weight.
>> CORRECT
2. If women have body anxiety to meet the standards of beauty, I want to say ‘Don’t mind it’.
2. If women have body anxiety to meet the standards of beauty, I want to say ‘Don’t mind it’.
>> If women have body anxiety to meet the standards of beauty, I want to say, ‘Don’t mind it!’
In fact, anywhere in the world, women have body anxiety because most women have been evaluated for their appearance since they were young.
In fact, anywhere in the world, women have body anxiety because most women have been evaluated for their appearance since they were young.
>> In fact, anywhere in the world, women have body anxiety because most women have been evaluated by their appearance since they were young.
It was taken for granted for women to have a pretty face and slim body.
It was taken for granted for women to have a pretty face and slim body.
>> The standard of the society is to see women with pretty face and slim body.
Wearing a makeup when women become an adult is a natural thing in the world.
Wearing a makeup when women become an adult is a natural thing in the world.
>> Women wearing makeup is a natural thing in the world.
But we should note that it is only imposed on women not men.
But we should note that it is only imposed on women not men.
>> But we should note that it is only imposed on women not on men.
Women care too much about their appearance because of a social atmosphere.
Women care too much about their appearance because of a social atmosphere.
>> Women care too conscious about their appearance because of the social custom.
To improve human right of woman, we should don’t mind our appearance
To improve human right of woman, we should don’t mind our appearance
>> To improve women rights, we should not mind our appearance too much.
It is time to stub out double standards.
It is time to stub out double standards.
>> CORRECT
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