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What can you say about requiring all women to attend the military as well? Do you think this is fair? Why or why not?
In my opinion, requiring all women to attend the military is not fair because military service is own selection for their country and dedication. In addition, male and female has difference physical ability so it can lead female to be dangerous if they can\'t adaption at military. Therefore, women\'s attending to military have to not requiring.
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In my opinion, requiring all women to attend the military is not fair because military service is own selection for their country and dedication.
>>> In my opinion, requiring all women to attend the military is not fair because military service should be volunteer for their country and dedication.
In addition, male and female has difference physical ability so it can lead female to be dangerous if they can\'t adaption at military.
>>> In addition, male and female have differences in physical abilities so it can lead female to be in danger if they can\'t adapt in the military.
Therefore, women\'s attending to military have to not requiring.
>>> Therefore, women attending the military should not be required.
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