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2021-04-29 · 첨삭 강사 Rachel

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I will show that friend our book and then I will say you are thin. Then if my friend is convinced I and my friend will eat snacks or play together. but it could be hard to convince a friend that has anorexia because they have a problem in their thinking of their body. but i,m shore my friend will understand because it is her body, not mine . and only she can choose who will se be and that is very very important. thank you ^^ -ruby-

강사 첨삭

Hello Ruby, 
Aw, you are such a sweet person. Although you know that it is hard to convince a person with anorexia, you still try your bet to help her. That is truly admirable! ^ ^
-Rachel
I will show that friend our book and then I will say you are thin.
>> correct
>> OR: I will show that friend the article from our book, then I will tell her that she is thin.
Then if my friend is convinced I and my friend will eat snacks or play together.
>> correct
>> OR: Then if my friend is convinced, we will eat snacks together.
but it could be hard to convince a friend that has anorexia because they have a problem in their thinking of their body.
>> correct
>> OR: But it could be hard to convince a friend that has anorexia because they have  a mental problem about their body.
but i,m shore my friend will understand because it is her body, not mine .
>> I am sure, my friend will understand though because it her body not mine.
and only she can choose who will se be and that is very very important.

>> And only she can choose who she will be and that is very important.

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