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2021-05-20 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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Kindly answer this question in essay form. What would you do if you where homeless? If I were homeless, I might find a job immediately. Everyone has their story and reason why they became homeless, but I believe that effort can make it change no matter what. As long as I have the ability, and could get opportunities to work, I can save some money. And, it will let me stand by myself. So, I would do any work to change the situation better.

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Hi Homer! Being homeless is a very hard situation. A lot of people around the world are experiencing this. We should learn how to value money and use it wisely to avoid being in this situation. So whenever you see a homeless person, try to give them help if you can :)

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I\'m so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

If I were homeless, I might find a job immediately.
>>If I were homeless, I will find a job immediately.

Everyone has their story and reason why they became homeless, but I believe that effort can make it change no matter what.
>>CORRECT

As long as I have the ability, and could get opportunities to work, I can save some money. 
>>As long as I have the ability and have opportunities to work, I can save some money. 

And, it will let me stand by myself.
>> This would let me stand by myself. 

So, I would do any work to change the situation better.
>> So, I would do anything to make my situation better. 

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