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2021-06-01 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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What does your dream house look like? Someday if I can afford it, I want to buy a house where is located on a very high floor. I like to see the cityscape and sunset, but there\'s a 50+ level building is located across the street just in front of my window. So, I can\'t see the entire sky and sightseeing. And second, It would be great if the ceiling is more than 5 meters because this condition makes me feel not stuffy. The last one is an outdoor terrace where I can feel the breeze and cook some barbeque in the open air.

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Hi Homer!
Wow, your visualization of your dream house is nice. I wish I had a house like that as well. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I\'m so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.Someday if I can afford it, I want to buy a house where is located on a very high floor. 
>>Someday, if I can afford, I want to buy a house that is located at a very high floor. 

I like to see the cityscape and sunset, but there\'s a 50+ level building is located across the street just in front of my window. 
>> I like looking at the cityscape and sunset but there\'s 50+ leveled buildings blocking my view so I can\'t see the entire sky and scenerie.

So, I can\'t see the entire sky and sightseeing.
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE. 

And second, It would be great if the ceiling is more than 5 meters because this condition makes me feel not stuffy.
>> Second, it would be great if the ceiling would be more than 5 meters. This would make me feel more comfortable. 

The last one is an outdoor terrace where I can feel the breeze and cook some barbeque in the open air.
>> CORRECT

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