Homework
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HOMEWORK:
When you are stressed, how do you feel physically?
When I\'m stressed, my mind is very complicated and annoyed a lot.
And this also affect on my physical things too. I usually eat a lot when I\'m stressed. Because of this habit, I will be fatter.
So if I grow fat, including everyone, our health will destroyed sooner. According to many scientists, they says stress might be harmful for our physical, and the brain health. It\'s more harmless for growing up children. Stress can affect on our growing too.
Also, if we frown a lot, than our impressions will look bad. However stress is no good for us and our health.
강사 첨삭
Hello Claire!
thank you for always being diligent in submitting your writing. See you tomorrow! ^^
~~Teacher Kate
>>CORRECT!
And this also affect on my physical things too.
And this also affect on my physical things too.
>>And this also affects my physical state too.
I usually eat a lot when I\'m stressed. Because of this habit, I will be fatter.
>>CORRECT!
So if I grow fat, including everyone, our health will destroyed sooner.
So if I grow fat, including everyone, our health will destroyed sooner.
>>So if I, along with everyone else, grow fatter, our health will deteriorate.
According to many scientists, they says stress might be harmful for our physical, and the brain health.
>>According to many scientists, stress might be harmful for our physical and mental health.
It\'s more harmless for growing up children. Stress can affect on our growing too.
>>It\'s more harmful to growing children. Stress can affect our growth too.
Also, if we frown a lot, than our impressions will look bad.
Also, if we frown a lot, than our impressions will look bad.
>>Also, if we frown a lot, other people\'s impression on us will be bad.
However stress is no good for us and our health.
>>CORRECT!
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