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2015-11-16 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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Do newspapers, magazines, television, radio, movies, the Internet, and other media determine what is important to most people? I agree with that. People is usually exposed by Media. Therefore, Media affect people's thinking, behavior and mind easily. If Media show us one of the accident deeply and focus on it , We would concentrate on the accident and think that it is very important thing.

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Do newspapers, magazines, television, radio, movies, the Internet, and other media determine what is important to most people?
I agree with that.
>>I agree on that.
People is usually exposed by Media.
>>People are usually exposed by media.
Therefore, Media affect people\'s thinking, behavior and mind easily.
>>Therefore, media affect people\'s thinking and behavior easily.
If Media show us one of the accident deeply and focus on it ,
>>If media show us one accident, we deeply focus on it.
We would concentrate on the accident and think that it is very important thing.

>>CORRECT!

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