homework 11/13 : Essay "If i marriage again..."

2015-11-15 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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My friend Jeny. When I create a dialog or sentence, I always try to do in the order subject, (adverb)+ verb, adjective + object, preposition + object of preposition, if possible. It is not easy yet to me. But thanks to your continuous correction, i feel getting better. I'll continue to strive . thanks. TGIF. = body = Topic today is very difficult to me. If i have to choice only one of two among good girl and beautiful girl, i justly will choice good girl. as a normal man,I had liked beautiful girl when i was more younger. but beauty does not last long, I know it well. Good personality is just beauty. In case of marriage, Good personality is most important for me. Are there not anyone having good personality and beauty? By the way, Friend jeny. Would you rather marry man plain with a good personality or man handsome without much personality?..haha

강사 첨삭

Hehehehe... Nice question, Oh!!!
I would go for a simple man with good personality.
But as we all know a person has his own bad sides, we just need to see a person\'s heart and deeds, if the person has good intentions for his family then love will reign.
T.Jeny

My friend Jeny.
>>correct
When I create a dialog or sentence, I always try to do in the order subject, (adverb)+ verb, adjective + object, preposition + object of preposition, if possible.
>>correct
It is not easy yet to me.
>>Yet, it is not easy for me.
But thanks to your continuous correction, i feel getting better.
>>But thanks fro your continuous corrections, I feel I\'m getting better.
I\'ll continue to strive . thanks.
>>correct
TGIF.
>>correct
= body =
Topic today is very difficult to me.
>>Today\'s topic is very difficult for me.
If i have to choice only one of two among good girl and beautiful girl, i justly will choice good girl.
>>If I have to choose one between a good girl and a beautiful girl,I will just choose a good girl.
as a normal man,I had liked beautiful girl when i was more younger. 
>>As a normal man, I had liked beautiful girls when I was young.
but beauty does not last long, I know it well.
>>I know for sure that beauty doesn\'t last long.
Good personality is just beauty.
>>Good personality is beauty.
In case of marriage, Good personality is most important for me.
>>In case of marriage, having a good personality is the most important thing for me.
Are there not anyone having good personality and beauty?
>>Are there anyone who doesn\'t have good personality and beauty?
By the way, Friend jeny.
>>correct
Would you rather marry man plain with a good personality or man handsome without much personality?..haha
>>Would you rather marry a simple man with good personality or a handsome man without much personality?..haha

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