homework 11
학생이 쓴 원문
Thank you Gemma
I was pleased to see you!
It\'s so hot these days, becareful not to get disease.
Have nice day!
강사 첨삭
Hi there Diego! Thanks for your essay! Your structure and writing flow were very good. Your writing was succinct, organized, and easy to read. You\'ve got this!
>>> TEACHER GEMMAAlthough parents are responsible for raising a child, outside influence plays a key role in their development. To what extent do you agree or disagree.I agree that outside influence is important when a child becomes an adult. >>> CORRECT~!^^There are varieties of outside influences.>>> CORRECT~!^^
One\'s childhood is influenced by one\'s neighbors, friends, communities and etc. >>> CORRECT~!^^Parents roll shrink when children go to school.>>> CORRECT~!^^They spend more time in school rather than at home.>>> CORRECT~!^^ They learn societies through community activities. >>> They learn [from society ] through community activities. These lessons cannot be earned through parents.>>> These lessons cannot be earned [from] parents. Children get the concepts about competition and cooperation, outside of a family. >>> CORRECT~!^^ The knowledge from outside is different from children\'s parents.>>> CORRECT~!^^ It is more active, real and diverse.>>> CORRECT~!^^ These stimulation encourage children to realize the world and what they are.>>> CORRECT~!^^ The outside influence will help child\'s mature. >>> The outside influence will help the child\'s [maturity].One day as a baby bird leave its nest, a child will grow up as an adult and leave their parents. >>> CORRECT~!^^I believe parents roll is becoming a guide when their child choose a direction and prevent from evil.>>> CORRECT~!^^OR>>> I believe parents should serve as mentors when their children make choices and safeguard them from harm.
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