homework 11.14
학생이 쓴 원문
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Can snow be dangerous?
When it snows, I feel that start the real winter season.
But, if it snows too much, there are many dangerous things.
I think the first of them is a green(plastic) house.
Many farmers using greenhouses to grow the fruits and the vegetables in winter.
However, if there are stack too much snow, the snow will destroy the greenhouse.
Similarly, the weak roofs houses can collapse because snow.
Next, the road freezes.
If we don\\\'t remove the snow on the road, the road becomes icy like an ice skating rink.
So many car can\'t move, or many people slip and get hurt.
강사 첨삭
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~ T. Camille
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Can snow be dangerous?
When it snows, I feel that start the real winter season.
Please answer the question:
Can snow be dangerous?
When it snows, I feel that start the real winter season.
>> When it snows, I feel that it\'s already the start of the real winter season.
But, if it snows too much, there are many dangerous things.
>> CORRECT!
I think the first of them is a green(plastic) house.
I think the first of them is a green(plastic) house.
>> I think the first of them is the green (plastic) house.
Many farmers using greenhouses to grow the fruits and the vegetables in winter.
>> Many farmers use greenhouses to grow the fruits and the vegetables in winter.
However, if there are stack too much snow, the snow will destroy the greenhouse.
>> However, if there is a big stack of snow, the snow will destroy the greenhouse.
Similarly, the weak roofs houses can collapse because snow.
>> Similarly, the weak houses\' roofs can collapse because of the snow.
Next, the road freezes.
>> Next are the frozen roads.
If we don\\\'t remove the snow on the road, the road becomes icy like an ice skating rink.
>> If we don\'t remove the snow on the road, the road becomes icy like an ice skating rink.
So many car can\'t move, or many people slip and get hurt.
So many car can\'t move, or many people slip and get hurt.
>> So many cars can\'t move, or many people slip and get hurt.
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