homework 11/17 : The best way to diet

2015-11-17 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Friend Jeny. I was surprised today morning at hearing your worry. Please don't be bothering about it. You have a charm, calm, soothing and active voice for me. But Some students can think your voice as inactive or dark voice. Please open your mind at their complain. and if you need to change your voice, please try to do that some degree. You can do it. and don't be disappointed. and i always say to your manager that you are gooood teacher. Merrily see you tomorrow, friend. = body = The best way to diet is only to proper exercise. Many women try to diet by taking a medicine or starving. But yon know well that those are not useful more. You know I regularly exercise 2~3 times in a week for 30 or 1 hour like running, push-up, sit-up,walking and lifting up dumbbell, etc. I exercised for 10 years more. As the result, I am a weighing 10kg or less. I weigh 76kg now. I exercised for my health first. Diet is a natural by-product of exercise.

강사 첨삭

Hello Oh.

Don\'t worry about me I feel good. I always think in a positive way just think you. I\'ve learned that from you. Thank you,

friend.

I don\'t need to complain anything about it because I made all the decisions in my life. Thank you for opening my eyes to reality.

I need to embrace my life. I know with God\'s help, we can overcome everything.
Nice job on you essay!!!!
T. Jeny

Friend Jeny

>>correct
I was surprised today morning at hearing your worry.

>>I was surprised to hear your voice, worried about something.
Please don\'t be bothering about it.

>>Please don\'t be bothered about that.
You have a charm, calm, soothing and active voice for me.

>>You have a charming, calming, soothing and an active voice for me.
But Some students can think your voice as inactive or dark voice.

>>But some students can think that your voice sounds inactive and low.
Please open your mind at their complain.

>>Please open your mind with their complains.
and if you need to change your voice, please try to do that some degree.

>>And if you need to change your voice, please try to do it in some degree.
You can do it. and don\'t be disappointed.

>>correct
and i always say to your manager that you are gooood teacher.

>>And I always say to your manager that you are a good teacher.
Merrily see you tomorrow, friend.
>>correct
= body =
The best way to diet is only to proper exercise.

>>the best way to exercise is to have a proper exercise.
Many women try to diet by taking a medicine or starving.

>>correct
But yon know well that those are not useful more.

>>But you know well that those are not useful.
You know I regularly exercise 2~3 times in a week for 30 or 1 hour like running, push-up, sit-up,walking and lifting up dumbbell, etc.
>>correct
I exercised for 10 years more.

>>I have been exercising for more than 10 years.
As the result, I am a weighing 10kg or less.

>>As a result, I lost 10 kg or less.
I weigh 76kg now.

>>correct
I exercised for my health first.

>>I exercise for my health.
Diet is a natural by-product of exercise.

>>Diet will become natural by exercising.

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