homework 11.20
학생이 쓴 원문
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you think anyone can start their own business?
I don\'t know much about business yet, but I think it\'s not difficult to start.
Instead, it\'s important how many long maintain business.
Many business people say that majority of private businesses fail within five years.
So, we need basic knowledge that for our business don\'t go fail.
The business man told we have to learn the basic working at the relevant workplace before starting the we want business.
This is the first step for own business.
To sum it up, anyone can start their own business, but it will be difficult to maintain it for a long time
without knowledge of the business.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you think anyone can start their own business?
I don\'t know much about business yet, but I think it\'s not difficult to start.
Please answer the question:
Do you think anyone can start their own business?
I don\'t know much about business yet, but I think it\'s not difficult to start.
>> CORRECT!
Instead, it\'s important how many long maintain business.
Instead, it\'s important how many long maintain business.
>> Instead, what\'s important is how long you have maintained the business.
Many business people say that majority of private businesses fail within five years.
>> CORRECT!
So, we need basic knowledge that for our business don\'t go fail.
So, we need basic knowledge that for our business don\'t go fail.
>> So, we need basic knowledge in order for our business to not fail.
The business man told we have to learn the basic working at the relevant workplace before starting the we want business.
>> The businessmen tell us we have to learn the basics when working at the relevant workplace before starting the business we want.
This is the first step for own business.
>> This is the first step for owning a business.
To sum it up, anyone can start their own business, but it will be difficult to maintain it for a long time
without knowledge of the business.
without knowledge of the business.
>> To sum it up, anyone can start their own business, but it will be difficult to maintain it for a long time without knowledge about the business.
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