homework 11.22

2023-11-23 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: How do you feel when you are in a cluttered or dirty environment? Compared to the past, I am become much strong in my stomach. But, I still don\'t like stinking places, food, or a place with dirty environment. Because I think I have a weak stomach and I can\'t stand the dirty or cluttered place for a long time. Sometimes I feel anxious after eating food in a place where hygiene is not good area. And cluttered place are make me the atmosphere bad and lowers focus and judgment. So when I go to restaurant or other place, I prefer a place with a calm atmosphere.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
How do you feel when you are in a cluttered or dirty environment?

Compared to the past, I am become much strong in my stomach.

>> Compared to the past, I have a much stronger stomach.

But, I still don\'t like stinking places, food, or a place with dirty environment.

>> CORRECT!
Because I think I have a weak stomach and I can\'t stand the dirty or cluttered place for a long time.

>> CORRECT!
Sometimes I feel anxious after eating food in a place where hygiene is not good area.

>> Sometimes I feel anxious after eating food in a place where hygiene is not observed.
And cluttered place are make me the atmosphere bad and lowers focus and judgment.

>> Also, cluttered places make the atmosphere bad and lowers focus and judgment.
So when I go to restaurant or other place, I prefer a place with a calm atmosphere.

>> CORRECT!

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