homework 11.23

2023-11-23 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: Do you agree that a person can still succeed in life without finishing college or having a degree? Why or why not? Actually I don\'t know well because I \'m not graduated from college. But, If we don\'t have a want job or want study that I think it\'s better go to study from college first. Because, in the past, only a few people went to college and to study. On the other hand, these days many people go to college and graduate like a must. So, If we study until high school and try to get a work, it will not be easy. Because many companies prioritize college graduates. Sum it up, the college diploma may or may not be helpful in life. But, I think it\'s good way go to college now days whether we like it or not.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you agree that a person can still succeed in life without finishing college or having a degree? Why or why not?


Actually I don\'t know well because I \'m not graduated from college.
>> Actually I don\'t know it well because I\'m not yet a graduate from college.
But, If we don\'t have a want job or want study that I think it\'s better go to study from college first.
>> But, if we don\'t want to have job, I think it\'s better to study in college first.
Because, in the past, only a few people went to college and to study.
>> Because, in the past, only a few people went to college and study.
On the other hand, these days many people go to college and graduate like a must.
>> On the other hand, these days many people go to college and graduate like it\'s a must.
So, If we study until high school and try to get a work, it will not be easy.
>> CORRECT!
Because many companies prioritize college graduates.
>> That\'s because many companies prioritize college graduates.
Sum it up, the college diploma may or may not be helpful in life.
>> To sum it up, the college diploma may or may not be helpful in life.
But, I think it\'s good way go to college now days whether we like it or not.
>> But, I think it\'s best to go to college nowadays, whether we like it or not.

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