homework 11.24

2023-11-25 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: What is the first thing that you always do when you visit a new place? When I visit a new place or trip, I first visit the accommodation where I will stay. And I keep my luggage and check the streets around accommodation location. In my case, I find what buildings are where the transportation\'s stop. These days also smartphone\'s app are well made. But In my opinion, sometimes it\'s can\'t always trust. Sometimes I am believe when I see or experience it with my own. So, when I visit a new place, I always take a walk and look around see. After that, I did modify of next plan or make a new plan.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

>> CORRECT!
And I keep my luggage and check the streets around accommodation location.

>> And I keep my luggage and check the streets around the accommodation\'s location.

In my case, I find what buildings are where the transportation\'s stop.

>> In my case, I find where the buildings are, and where are the public transportation stations.

These days also smartphone\'s app are well made.

>> These days, smartphone\'s apps are also well-made.

But In my opinion, sometimes it\'s can\'t always trust.

>> But in my opinion, sometimes it can\'t be trusted.

Sometimes I am believe when I see or experience it with my own.

>> Sometimes, I only believe when I see it or experience it on my own.

So, when I visit a new place, I always take a walk and look around see.

>> So, when I visit a new place, I always take a walk and look around the area.

After that, I did modify of next plan or make a new plan.

>> After that, I modify my next plans or make a new plan.

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