homework 11.30
학생이 쓴 원문
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Why are some people not interested in sports?
These days, many people who have hobbies.
For example, there are many kinds of exercise, watching movies, reading books or make a DIY
Anyway, I think one of the reason some people not interested in sports is that they are doing different hobbies or don\'t have enough time for hobby.
Actually, many modern people think they don\'t have enough time to do on hobby even if they have a hobby.
So, instead of spending time sports, I think they spending time in other hobbies.
Exercise can give our body health and positive things.
But this hobby requires more time investment than other hobbies.
That\'s why I think some people are not have interested in to do sports.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Why are some people not interested in sports?
These days, many people who have hobbies.
Please answer the question:
Why are some people not interested in sports?
These days, many people who have hobbies.
>> These days, many people find their own hobbies.
For example, there are many kinds of exercise, watching movies, reading books or make a DIY
>> For example, they do exercise, watch movies, read books, or make a DIY project.
Anyway, I think one of the reason some people not interested in sports is that they are doing different hobbies or don\'t have enough time for hobby.
Anyway, I think one of the reason some people not interested in sports is that they are doing different hobbies or don\'t have enough time for hobby.
>> Anyway, I think one of the reasons why some people are not interested in sports is that they are doing different hobbies or they don\'t have enough time for their hobbies.
Actually, many modern people think they don\'t have enough time to do on hobby even if they have a hobby.
Actually, many modern people think they don\'t have enough time to do on hobby even if they have a hobby.
>> Actually, many people nowadays think they don\'t have enough time to do their hobbies even if they have a hobby.
So, instead of spending time sports, I think they spending time in other hobbies.
So, instead of spending time sports, I think they spending time in other hobbies.
>> So, instead of spending time on sports, I think they spending time in other hobbies.
Exercise can give our body health and positive things.
>> Exercising can make our body healthy and give a lot of positive things.
But this hobby requires more time investment than other hobbies.
>> But this hobby requires more time to invest than other hobbies.
That\'s why I think some people are not have interested in to do sports.
>> That\'s why I think some people are not interested in doing sports.
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