Homework 11.4 / Why obesity is big problem in western countries.
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Why do you think obesity is becoming such a problem in the United States and throughout the world?
: The reasons why obesity is becoming big problem in other western countries are because of type of foods. There are so many instant foods such as hamburger and coke. Their eating habit is most important reasons of this. I think it is very risky. So they need to try to c[이름]ge their eating habits.
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The reasons why obesity is becoming big problem in other western countries are because of type of foods.
>> The reasons why obesity is becoming a big problem in other western countries are because of the type of foods.
There are so many instant foods such as hamburger and coke.
>> There are so many instant and fast foods such as hamburgers and coke.
Their eating habit is most important reasons of this.
>> Their eating habit is the most important reasons for this.
I think it is very risky. So they need to try to c[이름]ge their eating habits.
>> CORRECT!
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