homework 11

2016-06-28 · 첨삭 강사 camille

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What do you wish you had tried or done when you were younger? Why? One of my dream was becoming ordinary employee of company. Because i had no ambition future's dream. So once i wanted to get a job and live with family, friends happily. But i know that it is very hard to make that now. other thing was to playing soccer well. because it is fun when i played it with friends. So we always do that afterschool. . So i wanted to play well as well as the times gone.

강사 첨삭

Hi my dear Sun, happy Tuesday!How are you?I hope you are doing fine. Very good job on the composition you made. I hope you will keep up the good work. I can\'t wait to hear your voice again. Take care and have a good night. xoxoTeacher Cam^^ What do you wish you had tried or done when you were younger? Why?One of my dream was becoming ordinary employee of company. >>One of my dreams is to become an ordinary employee of a company.Because i had no ambition future\'s dream. >>Because I had no dreams at all. So once i wanted to get a job and live with family, friends happily.>>I once wanted to ge a job and live a happy life with my family and friends.But i know that it is very hard to make that now.>>correctother thing was to playing soccer well. >>I also want to play soccer well. because it is fun when i played it with friends. >>Because it is always fun to play soccer with my friends. So we always do that afterschool. >>correctSo i wanted to play well as well as the times gone. >>So I want to play well as time goes by.

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