homework#11

2019-08-12 · 첨삭 강사 Joylin

학생이 쓴 원문

Hi, joylin! I had really hardtime because I taked many tests in this weekend.:( I will receive the results about the certificate and English test in 6 September When I was in my first year of college, there were the biggest emergency in the human relations. I have friend who is my best friend in colleage. He loved one woman who is also my best friend. I was very close to her as just a friend, and he was jealous of it. Until then, there was no problem but when i was in the second grade, I started dating her. This maked problem. He treated me cynically without getting angry. It meant that he would quit friendship with me. There was many reasons why I started dating her, but I wanted to restore my relationship with him. So, I visited his home five times and explained my situation. He finally understood my situation and accepted my apology. I am getting along well with him now. It was a emergency in my relations. It happend five years ago, and now it\'s just a memorable event.

강사 첨삭

Hi Jonathan!
Happy Monday.
Do not be anxious about your test result. If you did your best, you will surely make it!
But, I know you put a lot of hard work in it so expect for the better.
Congratulations.
Here are my corrections.
When I was in my first year of college, there were the biggest emergency in the human relations.
>>When I was in my first year of college, there was a biggest emergency in the human relations.
I have friend who is my best friend in colleage. He loved one woman who is also my best friend.
>>I have a best friend in college. He loved one woman who is also my best friend.
I was very close to her as just a friend, and he was jealous of it.
>>I was very close to her just as a friend, and he was jealous of it.
Until then, there was no problem but when i was in the second grade, I started dating her. 
>>Until then, there was no problem but when I was in the second grade, I started dating her. 
This maked problem. He treated me cynically without getting angry. 
>>This made up the problem. He treated me cynically without getting angry. 
It meant that he would quit friendship with me.
>>It meant that he would quit our friendship.
There was many reasons why I started dating her, but I wanted to restore my relationship with him.
>>There were many reasons why I started dating her, but I wanted to restore my relationship with him.
So, I visited his home five times and explained my situation. 
>>Correct!
He finally understood my situation and accepted my apology.
>>Correct!
I am getting along well with him now. It was a emergency in my relations. 
>>I am getting along well with him now. It was an emergency situation in my relationship. 
It happend five years ago, and now it\'s just a memorable event.
>>It happened five years ago, and now it\'s just a memorable event.

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