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I think violent games and toys should not be allowed
Because I have a son, it matters to me, too.
I guess children who play violent games might become violent adults.
So parents should be watching weather their children play violent games.
But parents cannot be with their children all day, making a rule can be for the best.
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Hello, [이름].
Thank you for this! ^^
See you tomorrow~
See you tomorrow~
- T. Rina
1. I think violent games and toys should not be allowed
>> CORRECT!
2. Because I have a son, it matters to me, too.
>> CORRECT!
3. I guess children who play violent games might become violent adults.
>> CORRECT!
4. So parents should be watching weather their children play violent games.
>> So parents should be watching whether their children play violent games or not.
5. But parents cannot be with their children all day, making a rule can be for the best.
>> CORRECT!
2. Because I have a son, it matters to me, too.
>> CORRECT!
3. I guess children who play violent games might become violent adults.
>> CORRECT!
4. So parents should be watching weather their children play violent games.
>> So parents should be watching whether their children play violent games or not.
5. But parents cannot be with their children all day, making a rule can be for the best.
>> CORRECT!
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