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Q. Do you think that a person’s eating habits affect how long they will live?
A. I think eating habits are important for our health but not absolute factors, neither.
It depends on his or her mindedness, life cycle, degree of stress and even heredity.
We cannot forecast and assure that we always will be healthy.
So we have to pay our attention to our body sign and enjoy every moments in our lives.
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Jasmin
I think eating habits are important for our health but not absolute factors, neither.
>>I think eating habits are one of the main factors that affect our health but it still depends.
It depends on his or her mindedness, life cycle, degree of stress and even heredity.
It depends on his or her mindedness, life cycle, degree of stress and even heredity.
>>It also depends on the situation and sometimes the illnesses our hereditary.
We cannot forecast and assure that we always will be healthy.
We cannot forecast and assure that we always will be healthy.
>>We cannot be sure that we are always healthy.
So we have to pay our attention to our body sign and enjoy every moments in our lives.
So we have to pay our attention to our body sign and enjoy every moments in our lives.
>>We also need to pay attention on our body needs and let\'s not forget to have fun as well.
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