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Do you think diets are useful or not?
I think it\'s useful for my body and beauty.But it\'s not useful for my happiness. i can find my happiness in eating something delicious.But when i control what i eat, i have to patient of my hunger. i want to eat bread, rice and dduckbokyi. (whenever i have to control what i eat, these are what i want to eat) It\'s dangerous and the most of gaining weights.
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Good day, Ava!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. CamilleDo you think diets are useful or not?
I think it\'s useful for my body and beauty.
I think it\'s useful for my body and beauty.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> >> I think it\'s useful for my body and beauty, but it\'snot useful for my happiness.
But it\'s not useful for my happiness.
>> I think it\'s useful for my body and beauty, but it\'snot useful for my happiness.
i can find my happiness in eating something delicious.
>> I can find my happiness in eating something delicious.
But when i control what i eat, i have to patient of my hunger.
>> But when I control what I eat, I have to control of my hunger.
i want to eat bread, rice and dduckbokyi. (whenever i have to control what i eat, these are what i want to eat)
>> I want to eat anything that is rich in carbohydrates (found in bread and rice).
It\'s dangerous and the most of gaining weights
>> It\'s not a good idea especially when we gain weight.
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