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2021-08-31 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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If I can eat one food for the rest of my life, I will choose Japchae. Japchae is my favorite food. I love all dishes made with vermicelli. and Japchae includes meet and various vegetables. These things can be good for my health. But you can feel greasy due to a lot of oil. So I can think I want to eat Kimchi. ^^ Now I want to eat Japchea... P.S. The customer complained the Lack of quantity. Quantity 400g is not enough. It will be ready like below. They have over 20kgs. Could you advise if you send it to our office yesterday? If it is not yours, could you advise who is in charge of it?

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름] Mi! ^^

I love Japchea too. I remember the first time I ate was in Korean restaurant. Me and my husband were eating samgyupsal during that time and it was heavenly.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I\'m so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you [이름]n.

If I can eat one food for the rest of my life, I will choose Japchae.
>>CORRECT

Japchae is my favorite food.
>> CORRECT

I love all dishes made with vermicelli.
>>I love all dishes made with vermicelli and Japchae includes meat and various vegetables.

and Japchae includes meet and various vegetables.
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE.

These things can be good for my health.
>> These food are good for our health.

But you can feel greasy due to a lot of oil.
>> Although, it can feel greasy due to a lot of oil.

So I can think I want to eat Kimchi. ^^
>> So, I think I want to eat Kimchi instead.

Now I want to eat Japchea...
>> HAHAHAHAHA! You felt hungry while answering this homework ^^.

P.S.
The customer complained the Lack of quantity.
>> The customer complained about the lack of quantity.

Quantity 400g is not enough.
>> 400 grams is not enough.

It will be ready like below.
>> It will be ready like the one below.

They have over 20kgs.
>> CORRECT

Could you advise if you send it to our office yesterday?
>> Could you inform me right away if you already sent it to our office?

If it is not yours, could you advise who is in charge of it?
>> If not, could you inform me who is in charge of this? It will be a great help.

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