homework
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HOMEWORK:
ESSAY: Kindly answer the question with 3-4 sentences.
What is your favorite place in your city and why?
My favorite place is Dongtan lake park. Because I can see a beautiful view at night. There are so many buildings make me feel like I\'m on the streets of New York. When I take for a walk in that park, I can feel energetic by meeting various people who walk with their dogs.
So I often take a walk that place for me to refresh.
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Hi [이름]:)
That sounds so relaxing. I wish I can go there and experience it myself. :)
My favorite place is Dongtan lake park.
>> CORRECT
Because I can see a beautiful view at night.
>> It is because I can see a beautiful view there at night.
There are so many buildings make me feel like I\'m on the streets of New York.
>> There are so many buildings that makes me feel like I\'m on the streets of New York.
When I take for a walk in that park, I can feel energetic by meeting various people who walk with their dogs.
>> When I take for a walk at that park, I feel energetic by meeting various people who walk with their dogs.
So I often take a walk that place for me to refresh.
>> So I often take a walk on that place to refresh my mind.
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