homework
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Kindly answer the following in essay form.
How do you think can we encourage people to take the COVID-19 vaccine?
I think COVID-19 vaccine should be more effective. It is because there are many COVID-19 patients who are vaccinated. These examples of breakthrough infection are continually occurring now. So I can\'t believe COVID-19 vaccine\'s effects.
Also COVID-19 vaccine causes many side effects. Actually I experienced that after vaccinated booster shot, that\'s so painful to me. So I think that\'s why some people reject to get the vaccine. It is necessary to be better than now.
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Hi [이름]:)
Yes, that is true. There are some side effects to it. I experienced it myself but I think the purpose of the vaccine now is to lessen the effects of the virus and not lead us to being hospitalized.
I think COVID-19 vaccine should be more effective.
>> I think COVID-19 vaccines should be more effective.
It is because there are many COVID-19 patients who are vaccinated.
>> It is because there are still many COVID-19 patients who got infected even if they are already vaccinated.
These examples of breakthrough infection are continually occurring now.
>> CORRECT
So I can\'t believe COVID-19 vaccine\'s effects.
>> So, I don\'t believe that the vaccine is effective.
Also COVID-19 vaccine causes many side effects.
>> Also, the COVID-19 vaccine causes many side effects.
Actually I experienced that after vaccinated booster shot, that\'s so painful to me.
>> Actually, I experienced it when I got the booster shot. It was so painful for me.
So I think that\'s why some people reject to get the vaccine.
>> So I think that this is why a lot of people refuse to get the vaccine.
It is necessary to be better than now.
>> CORRECT
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